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Answer #1 | 26/12 2013 13:13
This does sound interesting but the first impression I get is that you're trying to get a whole bunch of back ground info out at the start. Why not make the beginning a bit more character driven - introduce some action that pulls us in and slowly introduce the history....perhaps a woman giving birth during a harsh winter storm - the walls creaking from the blasts of wind etc etc..just my thoughts! I like your direction though - I love epic fantasy!
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