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Pokemon Fans I'm writing a fan fiction piece critique and gve me your opinions?

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Answer #1 | 29/12 2013 00:42
What's needed here is a good old fashioned proofread. Proofread s-l-o-w-l-y. I'll ask you to keep in mind a rule or two. Avoid such words as "almost" and "seemed". The reader wants to know what is and what isn't. The other rule is, learn what makes a sentence run on, and avoid that. Although not technically incorrect, a run-on sentence can drive a reader to madness. In other words, avoid anything which might make the reader stumble. Comma usage is very important. You might say, they tell the reader where to "breathe". Now, in regard to the 9 thousand, go here to learn how to write numbers into your work: http://www.grammarbook.com/numbers/numbers.asp Change the word "than" to "then". Change this: "Kai caught his scroll in his hands and pulled out his staff from his tunic and said, “Today you will learn what a pokemon battle means." To this.: Kai caught his scroll in his hands, pulled his staff from his tunic and said, “Today you will learn what a pokemon battle means." As far as how you show us the scene, you're awesome! Very descriptive without being nit-picky. My grandkids would love this stuff!
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