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How is my writing. Please review.?

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Answer #1 | 30/12 2013 04:42
Dee and Kellsey have given you good advice. Take it. To be very honest, it is awkward. There are too many grammatical errors and awkward phrasing - a voice came thrusting my heart to death. What does that mean? How does a voice thrust? Just tell the story like you were telling your friend. Sorry.

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